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Page from WW3 - vintage

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September 17, 2011. A 2020 magazine page, as found in a war thorn city five years later. All made by Photoshop for storymaking and practice. (Akamiya Satoshi is how I named myself in Japanese ^^)

If you play country leading games like Supreme Ruler you will understand ^^

Please leave language suggestions because I'm not a native English user.
The content is all fantasy. If you think anything is inappropriate to post in DA please tell me first so I may remove it (This is the first time so I'm just worrying).
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Kurarun's avatar
This looks pretty cool - I'd like to see other things from this future world! :)

"Please leave language suggestions because I'm not a native English user."

I think I can help here. I could nitpick at every minor mistake in your text, but that'd take too long and might be counter-productive, so I'll focus on some of the larger pieces of text. For example:

"Also, an establishment of the World Order Force is planned, in hope to replace the weakened United Nations, and lead this world out of instability."

There are a few things here that are not standard English. Using "an establishment" seems to suggest that "establishment" refers to something that has been established, like a government. "The establishment" would, in this context, suggest an event at which something is established, which I believe is what you intended. Similarly "the World Order Force" suggests that the World Order Force already exists, whereas "a World Order Force" would suggest that it does not yet exist.

In correct English the sentence would read more like this:

"Also, the establishment of a World Order Force is being planned, in hopes of replacing the weakened United Nations, and lead the world out of this instability."

If I were to write this sentence again, however, I would write it more like this:

"Also, we are planning to establish a World Order Force in order to replaced the weakened United Nations and bring the world out of this period of instability."

Both versions are correct and sound acceptable to a native English speaker, though.

Let me know if you wouldn't mind me going through the rest of the text. :)